
Sun/Son
Sun
looks down
from the sky
as if a father
judging
Son
looks up
from down below
as if in awe
admiring
Copyright © 2023 Brandon Ellrich
This poem was written in response to David’s W3 Prompt #54: Wea’ve Written Weekly on The Skeptic’s Kaddish. Please visit his page to read other responses. The prompt was provided by Sadje. Here prompt guidelines:
- Write an ‘elfchen’ poem;
- Extra challenge: write a second elfchen poem, which opposes the first one.
Elfchen poetic form
An elevenie (German: elfchen) is a short poem with a given pattern. It contains eleven words which are arranged in a specified order over five rows. Each row has a requirement that can vary.
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I left a comment on your page but I don’t know if you’ll see it or it’s swallowed by WP. A very good topic for you poems. The contrast between son and sun so well highlighted
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Thank you very much! I appreciate it and I liked the form you chose. I hadn’t seen it before.
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Thanks! Another blogger was writing Elfchen for a week and I loved the idea of counting words not syllables.
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that’s one reason that I like the ‘septolet’ too –
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/septolet.html
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Thanks for sharing.
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That is so TRUE – how little boys think of their fathers! Wow, Brandon! I relate so hard.
~David
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Oh, so glad to hear it. Thank you!
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Hi, Brandon ❤
Just wanna let you know that this week's W3 prompt, hosted by our beloved Punam, is now live:
Enjoy!
Much love,
David
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Wow! Brandon, I love this.
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Thank you!
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You are welcome.
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Brandon ❤
Just wanna let you know that this week's W3, hosted by the brilliant Suzette Benjamin is now live (it's up until Monday):
Enjoy!
Much love,
David
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Thank you! 😊
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🤗
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